Monday 2 September 2019

The bully

Once there lived a doll. This doll was named Annabelle. She had brown hair, a blue dress, and white shoes. One day Annabelle was in her box on the shelf in a big, big store. She was waiting to get bought. Then all of a sudden her box started to move. She did not know what was happening then she thought perhaps she would be going to a new home.

 On the way to her new home, she could not see what was happening because she got put into a bag. Then her bag started to move. She saw a little hand dig down and pick up her box and pulled it up. Annabelle saw a little girl and she was happy. The little girl opened up the box and pulled Annabelle up into her arms. When she got to her new home the little girl carried Annabelle in. When Annabelle saw her new home, she felt like the luckiest toy in all the world.

 She wanted to go in and say hi to all the toys. When they went in Annabelle so badly wanted to go and see where she would be staying. When it was time to go and see the toy room she thought, ‘what if the other toys don’t like me ́? But it was too late. Annabelle went into the room; she was so so happy. The other toys were so excited to see her too. But there was one toy that did not like her. This toy had a box for a head and lego arms and blocks for feet.

 Annabelle wanted to say hi but he did not. It was Annabelle's first night in her new home. While she was asleep the mean toy got a vivid and started to draw on Annabelle’s face. The next morning all the toy’s saw Annabelle’s face. They did not know what to say. When the little girl got up she screamed she called for her mum and dad. Annabelle didn’t know what was happening.

 The toy’s told Annabelle what box head had done to her face she started to cry. The next day the other toys came up with a plan; that they shared it with Annabelle. She agreed so they set it up. When they had finished they waited and waited. The mean toy walked straight into their trap.

 Annabelle liked the trap. It was made up of a rope and when box head stepped into it he flew right upside in mid-air then he stepped into it went BOOM. ’’What are you doing?’’ the mean toy yelled. The police toy said,” you know what you have done so you’re going away for a long long time”.Then the other toy’s had a big party to celebrate and they lived in peace.

6 comments:

  1. This is an amazing piece of writing Eilish I loved reading it.😁

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  2. I was worried when i started reading because it all seemed so happy but the title suggested there might be something bad coming. I'm so relieved all the other toys helped Annabelle to solve her problem! You really drew me into the story.

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  3. I think that it's really smart to write a fiction story when it happens in real life.

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  4. That was great story Eilish. I liked how it took away "the mean toy" at the end.

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  5. Your story is very interesting. I wish it was a movie.

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